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Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

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Some people think that
life
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 is more difficult these days in comparison with the past.
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, I think it is easier to live and
life
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 is more comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss
this
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 subject with two reasons and give some examples.
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, by expanding the technology and some applications for smartphones that are lifehack for many modern people,
life
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 is more comfortable and almost everything is more reachable.
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, public transportation vehicles make it easier to get from here to another point
of
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in
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 the city in a few hours. Through a
smartphone
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smartphone,
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 you can do your shopping and take it from home without getting out and wasting your time and energy. So,
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 of technological progress you can reach most of the things after some hours that maybe in the past it took days or months to reach them.
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, nowadays most of the companies in the world agree to
work
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 online. You can live everywhere that you want and
work
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 for a company on the other side of the world.
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, you can choose the
working-hours
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working hours
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 that are suitable.
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, my mother loves nature and she admires the garden in the village where she was born. Now, she works online for a company, which is in the capital of the country. She is satisfied that she
doest
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does
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 have to leave home at 6 o’clock in
morning
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the morning
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 to
work
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 like her parents. So, online working is one of the best opportunities these days that makes
life
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 easier and increases comfort and motivation for
work
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. In conclusion, technological progress, some lifehack applications for smartphones,
expanding
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the expanding
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 service industry and
online-
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online work
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work
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 conditions are some facilities that help people to have a more comfortable
life
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 in comparison with our grandparents. (300 words)

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