sportChange the noun form
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events
such
as
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are a huge phenomenon. Every four
yearFix the agreement mistake
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, a
country
will be chosen to hold the
events
. Holding the
games
can greatly
the
economy.
While
some people believe that it has negative effects,
otherFix the agreement mistake
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think that countries
from
such
events
and it is a chance for them to boost
economy. I strongly agree with the second idea and an
for it can be the
number
of job opportunities which are created for the people during
Olympic
in the
holder
countries and the growth in the
.
On the one hand,
SportChange the noun form
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events
can create a lot of job opportunities.
OlympicCorrect article usage
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games
attract a considerable
number
of visitors to the
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country
.
First,
these
need a place to stay and
transportationsFix the agreement mistake
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for commuting during the
games
, so they would reserve a hotel and need cars or
kinds of
transportationsFix the agreement mistake
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.
Then
, an increase in the
number
of guests causes the hotels and transportation systems to hire more
staffsFix the agreement mistake
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thatCorrect pronoun usage
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can eventually bring a lot of
to work.
Additionally
, providing food for the
games
'
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is another
forChange preposition
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a rise in the
number
of hirings.
, the
countriesChange noun form
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food industry can
also
benefit from
such
sportChange the noun form
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events
. So, holding
OlympicCorrect article usage
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games
can
hotels,
systems and food industries to hire more staff.
On the other hand
,
OlympicCorrect article usage
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games
can boost the tourism industry. For one thing,
from all around the world get to spend days in the
holderReplace the word
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country
and they may be interested in having fun and enjoying the
touristicReplace the word
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attractionFix the agreement mistake
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of the
country
.
For instance
, they would like to enjoy historical sites
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or enjoy the natural attractions of the
.
Also
, a lot of people tend to
for their loved ones or
take back a piece of memory with
to their homelands. Eventually,
this
can
improvesChange the verb form
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the
.
In conclusion, holding
games
can have so many
for
including a decrease in the rate of unemployment and
also
a development in the tourism
. So, I believe, being a
holder
for the
sportChange the noun form
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events
is
bigAdd an article
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opportunity for
.