The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts
illustrates
different types of devices that Change the verb form
illustrate
people
between the age group 18 to 25 use
to watch television
in Canada in different periods of time.
Overall
, the use
of conventional TV
was hitting his
peak in 2009, Correct pronoun usage
its
however
, over time he
fluctuated, having the lowest proportion in 2019.Correct pronoun usage
it
While
the usage of flat-screen TV
display
a significant rise, being the most Wrong verb form
displayed
use
device in 2019. Replace the word
used
Whereas
, the proportion of people
who used to watch television
on laptop
has decreased. Add an article
a laptop
the laptop
Additionally
, the percentage of people
who watched television
on mobile phones have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
rose
Change the verb form
risen
up
over the period given.
The usage of conventional Change preposition
apply
TV
have
fluctuated from Change the verb form
has
having
34% in 2009 to 4% in 2019, over the decade, conventional Unnecessary verb
apply
TV
is
their Wrong verb form
has been
last
choice of device. While
the
flat-screen Correct article usage
apply
TV
have
an upward trend, reaching from 8% in 2009 to 27% in 2019, being the most used device to watch Change the verb form
has
television
in Canada.
Also
, tablets have a
significant rise over the decade, having around 19% of Add a missing verb
had a
people
that are
using Verb problem
apply
it
.
Meanwhile, the number of Correct pronoun usage
them
people
who use
laptops to watch television
has decreased from 20% to 12%.Submitted by annaungureanu794 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, use, television, tv with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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