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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packing are bad for the environment. What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem ?

Over the
last
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 few years,  most
people
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throw
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have thrown
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 away their waste
at
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on
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street
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the street
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 especially,plastic
product
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products
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 and as
result
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a result
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,it
damage
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has damaged
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 the atmosphere and environment. In
this
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 essay, I will do my best to discuss and give relevant
example
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examples
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 for
solve
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this
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 issue.      On the one hand, nowadays many
people
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 are very lazy, so they don't throw
the
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their
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 waste 
to
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into
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 the rubbish and  it
bring
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brings
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 a lot of diseases and the Azone
erriosion
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erosion
.
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, climate change or global warming.
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,many
people
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 suffer from global warming and skin diseases and even,in the future,it will bring deadly diseases.
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,another significant reason
of
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this
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 issue could be that, If
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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continue
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continues
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 to
damaging
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damage
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, it may be
ruduce
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reduce
live
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in
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 Earth. Because, as a reason of Azone
erriosion
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erosion
, in the Earth reduce the water, plants, animals and others.     
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, despite the fact that damaging
environment
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the environment
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 one a serious
problem
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, there are some reliable
solutios
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solutions
solution
 to it. The first viable solution to
this
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problem
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is increase
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is increasing
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number
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the number
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 of rubbish
at
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on
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 the streets. And
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government
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the government
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, not
also
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government
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may
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be
also
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people
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 should to worried about each
others
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other
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, If we continue to damage
environment
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the environment
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, one day  we can not live there,
becouse
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because
 life
is
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will
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 end and  Oxygen
also
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 decrease on the Earth. Another significant way by which
this
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problem
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 can be tackled is that If
people
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 continue to throw waste
at
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on
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the street
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street
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streets
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,
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government
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the government
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 should
to
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apply
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punishment for
community
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the community
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.
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, less their salary or clean the streets.    
To conclude
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,
although
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 environmental footprint are serious
problem
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that is
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 creating many negative effects, it can be addressed with the solutions that have been mentioned
is
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in
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 previous paragraphs. From my point of view, in order to tackle
this
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problem
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,
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government
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the government
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 and residents should
be
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apply
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pay attention to low and need to
be
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have
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 a closer connection to nature.

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grammar
Work on sentence structure and grammar to reduce errors and improve readability. For example, 'it bring a lot of diseases and the Azone erriosion' should be 'it brings a lot of diseases and ozone layer erosion.'
vocabulary
Use a wider range of vocabulary and phrases to avoid repetition and improve overall writing quality. For instance, instead of repeatedly saying 'people should,' consider alternative expressions such as 'individuals must' or 'citizens ought to.'
clarity
Develop your ideas more clearly. For instance, elaborate on how increased rubbish bins can solve the problem and provide specific examples or case studies.
structure
You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is essential for a well-organized essay.
task understanding
You have identified key problems related to plastic waste and offered solutions for both the government and individuals, showing an understanding of the task.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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