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the following chart provides information regarding the fertility in births per woman in six gulf states from 1990 to 2000

the following chart provides information regarding the fertility in births per woman in six gulf states from 1990 to 2000
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The provided bar chart illustrates information
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 women in six different Gulf countries,
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 as Bahrain, Kuwait, Qatar, Oman, S.Arabia and UAE between 1990 and 2000.
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fertility rate in 1990 was generally higher compared to 2000.
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, standing at the peak of 7
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 per woman, Oman witnessed a bit sudden decrease of around 2.5 by 2000.
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, the figure for S. Arabia had a following decline from nearly 7 to roughly 2.5
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 per woman. Compared to other nations, Qatar and UAE had the same number of
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 in 1990, with about 4
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 per female;
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, by the year 2000, the birth rate in UAE had quickly slumped faster than that in Qatar. Like the nations mentioned above, the vicinity of 3.5 represented the birth rates in both Bahrain and Kuwait. Until 2000, women in Kuwait had given birth to more children than those in Bahrain, representing around 3.8
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