In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In
few
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a few
countries
,people have access
to diversified food
like crops, fruits and vegetables
, which are produced in other parts of the world. It has numerous benefits for populace
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the populace
like
it Correct word choice
as
provide
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provides
variety
of exotic Add an article
a variety
food
item
to consume, promotes Fix the agreement mistake
items
general
health of Add an article
the general
public
, and Add an article
the public
boost
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boosts
general
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the general
well being
of Add a hyphen
well-being
public
. Add an article
the public
Whereas
, it promotes pollution as it transported
by Add a missing verb
is transported
airplane
which increases carbon Change the spelling
aeroplane
emission
and Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
farming
industry produces crops for only import and local people can not consume those products.
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the farming
To begin
with,,
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apply
Countries
which imports
exotic and rare fruits, Correct subject-verb agreement
import
vegetables
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and vegetables
provides
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provide
plethora
of Add an article
a plethora
option
to consume for Fix the agreement mistake
options
global
population. People have Add an article
the global
a global
access
to highly
nutritional variety of Add an article
a highly
food
to eat which keeps them healthy.For
example
In The US, mangos are imported from Add a comma
example,
india
in Change the capitalization
India
summer
season. Many Add an article
the summer
american
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American
citizen
have a chance to eat mangos. It Change to a plural noun
citizens
also
provides nutritional value to consumers.
Furthermore
, it boost
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boosts
local
economy of exporter Add an article
the local
countries
and provide
substantial income to farmers. By exporting exotic Change the verb form
provides
food
item
they earn a decent amount of money to take care of their families. It Fix the agreement mistake
items
also
boost
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boosts
local
economy of exporting Add an article
the local
countries
.To illustrate Many asian countries
like vietnam
, Change the capitalization
Vietnam
India
exports fresh Correct word choice
and India
vegetable
to the Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
middle
east Capitalize word
Middle
countries
which provides good
source of income for them.
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a good
However
, there are certain drawback
too, like it promotes air pollution and Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
local
population is deprived of Add an article
the local
high quality
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high-quality
food
products. Majority
of Correct article usage
The majority
exporting
Verb problem
apply
vegetables
,crops
are Correct word choice
and crops
done
through Verb problem
exported
Air planes
which emit carbon Correct your spelling
Aeroplanes
emission
and contaminate Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
Air
. Correct article usage
the Air
In addition
to that, exporter do not sell their produce in local markets which deprives local
public of healthier Add an article
the local
foods meal
. Fix the agreement mistake
food meals
For example
, In dubai
, Change the capitalization
Dubai
vegetables
are exported from India which prompt
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prompts
exporter
to sell entire produce to export in order to earn more money.
In conclusion, Few Fix the agreement mistake
exporters
countries
are enjoying the benefits of having access
to food
produce
from other Wrong verb form
produced
location
across the globe. Fix the agreement mistake
locations
Whereas
exporting countries
have to compromise with low quality
Add a hyphen
low-quality
food
produce. The advantages of having access
to variety
of Add an article
a variety
food
products outweigh the drawbacks.Submitted by yash334 on
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task achievement
Your essay addresses the task and presents a clear stance on the issue. However, try to frame your introduction and conclusion more precisely. The opening sentence has a few grammatical issues. It could be rephrased to be clearer.
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coherence cohesion
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content
Your essay successfully discusses both the advantages and disadvantages of importing food. You clearly present examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.
task achievement
You have a good understanding of the topic and offer insightful points regarding both the positive and negative aspects of the issue. Your examples, like the one about mangoes in the US, are relevant and make your essay more engaging.
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