In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In
few
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a few
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countries
,people have
access
to diversified
food
like crops, fruits and
vegetables
, which are produced in other parts of the world. It has numerous benefits for
populace
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like
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as
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it
provide
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provides
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variety
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a variety
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of exotic
food
item
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items
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to consume, promotes
general
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the general
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health of
public
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the public
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, and
boost
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boosts
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general
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the general
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well being
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well-being
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of
public
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the public
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.
Whereas
, it promotes pollution as it
transported
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is transported
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by
airplane
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aeroplane
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which increases carbon
emission
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emissions
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and
farming
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the farming
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industry produces crops for only import and local people can not consume those products.
To begin
with,
,
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Countries
which
imports
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import
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exotic and rare fruits,
vegetables
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and vegetables
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provides
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provide
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plethora
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a plethora
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of
option
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options
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to consume for
global
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the global
a global
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population. People have
access
to
highly
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a highly
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nutritional variety of
food
to eat which keeps them healthy.
For
example
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In The US, mangos are imported from
india
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India
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in
summer
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the summer
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season. Many
american
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American
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citizen
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citizens
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have a chance to eat mangos. It
also
provides nutritional value to consumers.
Furthermore
, it
boost
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boosts
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local
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the local
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economy of exporter
countries
and
provide
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provides
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substantial income to farmers. By exporting exotic
food
item
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items
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they earn a decent amount of money to take care of their families. It
also
boost
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boosts
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local
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the local
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economy of exporting
countries
.To illustrate Many asian
countries
like
vietnam
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Vietnam
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,
India
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and India
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exports fresh
vegetable
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vegetables
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to the
middle
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Middle
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east
countries
which provides
good
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a good
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source of income for them.
However
, there are certain
drawback
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drawbacks
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too, like it promotes air pollution and
local
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the local
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population is deprived of
high quality
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high-quality
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food
products.
Majority
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The majority
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of
exporting
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apply
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vegetables
,
crops
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and crops
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are
done
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exported
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through
Air planes
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Aeroplanes
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which emit carbon
emission
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emissions
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and contaminate
Air
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the Air
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.
In addition
to that, exporter do not sell their produce in local markets which deprives
local
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the local
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public of healthier
foods meal
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food meals
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.
For example
, In
dubai
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Dubai
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,
vegetables
are exported from India which
prompt
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prompts
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exporter
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exporters
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to sell entire produce to export in order to earn more money. In conclusion, Few
countries
are enjoying the benefits of having
access
to
food
produce
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produced
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from other
location
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locations
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across the globe.
Whereas
exporting
countries
have to compromise with
low quality
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low-quality
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food
produce. The advantages of having
access
to
variety
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a variety
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of
food
products outweigh the drawbacks.
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Your essay addresses the task and presents a clear stance on the issue. However, try to frame your introduction and conclusion more precisely. The opening sentence has a few grammatical issues. It could be rephrased to be clearer.
coherence cohesion
The essay is logically structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the body paragraphs can benefit from a better use of linking words and phrases to ensure smooth transitions between ideas. Try to avoid repetition and keep the flow coherent.
coherence cohesion
In your essay, there are small grammatical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes, such as 'populace' instead of 'population' and 'air planes' instead of 'airplanes.' Pay more attention to correct usage to enhance clarity and readability.
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Your essay successfully discusses both the advantages and disadvantages of importing food. You clearly present examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.
task achievement
You have a good understanding of the topic and offer insightful points regarding both the positive and negative aspects of the issue. Your examples, like the one about mangoes in the US, are relevant and make your essay more engaging.

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