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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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A great number of youngsters leave their
country
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 to study or live in a more developed
country
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 these days.
This
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 situation has drawbacks,
such
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 as cultural and language barriers.
On the other hand
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,
people
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, who left their
country
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, can build friendly
relations
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 between nations
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,
people
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,
which
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who
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 moved to another
coutry
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country
 in order to get
education
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an education
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, would have linguistic and ethnic divides. Every nation has its traditions, history, language and dialects. Even individual
have
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C2
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a C2
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 level of foreign and
study
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studies
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whole
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the whole
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 history, culture, traditions etc, he would have
language
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a language
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 and ethnic barrier with representers of
nation
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the nation
a nation
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 and native speakers.
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, scientists from Oxford
university
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University
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had
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 a study and found
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that 89% of
emigrants
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immigrants
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 would have ethnic and linguistic barriers.
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, to destroy
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this barriers
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this barrier
these barriers
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,
migrant
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migrants
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 need to live in
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country
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the country
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 for 6 years.
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, individuals left their motherland and live in foreign
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country
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countries
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 have
possibility
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the possibility
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 to create
relations
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 between
to
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two
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 nations. Representatives of different nationalities might build
relationship
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relationships
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 by presenting their culture,
traditions
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and traditions
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 and by destroying stereotypes.
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,
kazakhs
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bulid
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built
 friendly
relations
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 with
german
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German
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 and
hungarian
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Hungarian
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people
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 in
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last
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the last
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 decades. Thanks to
this
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 experience, in Hungary and Germany residents greet
kazakh
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people
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 with open arms. In conclusion, more and more
people
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 move on to another republic in order to get
education
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an education
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at
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these days, and it has both benefits and drawbacks. Living in dissimilar
republic
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republics
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,
individual
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individuals
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 will have cultural and linguistic
border
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borders
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, but
also
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 it would help different nationalities to build friendly
relations
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coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, work on organizing ideas more clearly. Make sure each paragraph sticks to a single main idea and flows logically from one to the next. This will help you achieve a higher score.
task achievement
For a more complete response, ensure that you provide balanced discussions on both advantages and disadvantages. Use additional examples to support your points and add more depth to your arguments. This will help you improve your score in task achievement.
language
On grammar accuracy, note that sentences can be simplified and grammatical errors reduced. Double-check for small mistakes, such as correct use of articles and subject-verb agreement, to make your writing clearer.
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and attempts to address both advantages and disadvantages of living or studying abroad. This fulfills the requirement of task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are well-presented, giving the essay a clear starting and ending point.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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