The given two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities with European adults in 1985 and 1995.

The given two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities with European adults in 1985 and 1995.
The given pie chart compares the results of
a
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research about
proportion
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the proportion
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of spare time interests of European
grown-up
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grown-ups
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during the period 1985 to 1985. The most significant fact to emerge was
an
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appearance of computer games,
further
, we can see minor changes in other sections. First of all, watching TV and talking with friends remained almost unchanged, because the first one in 1985
iwitnessed
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witnessed
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32% and was 30% in 1995,
also
the second one was 21% in
year
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1985 and saw 26% in 1995.
Furthermore
, it is important to note that adults started playing more computer games by 1995.
Secondly
, talking with family and eating out decreased, since the first unit saw 18% in 1985 and 7% in 1995,
whereas
the second unit altered from 23% to 8% between 1985 and 1995 years. Other activities stayed as the smallest one
while
changed from 6% to 2% in a decade.
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