The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two figures illustrate the period and reasons the immigrants lived in the United Kingdom from 2000 until 2008.
It is clear that
most of the people spend up to 2 Linking Words
years
there. Use synonyms
Also
, the main reason was for work.
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According to
the chart, the majority of immigrants spent close to two Linking Words
years
in the UK from the year 2001 until 2008. Use synonyms
In addition
, around 150 lived for four or more Linking Words
years
and the line was steady from the year 2000 till 2008. Use synonyms
Finally
, the lowest number of them spent about two to four Linking Words
years
but the number of those people was Use synonyms
also
the lowest where they accounted for almost 50 people.
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On the contrary
, the pie chart explained the reasons behind their staying in the year 2008. Linking Words
Moreover
, work and study were the top reasons where they scored more than 30% of the rest. Linking Words
Next,
joining their families comes next in percentage accounting for 16%. Linking Words
Lastly
, Others and non-reasons were the smallest proportion at about 7%.Linking Words
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