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Some people believe that universities should only accept students with high marks. Others think that students of all ages and ability levels should be able to attend. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 00.10

#people #universities #students #marks #ages #ability #levels
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universities
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became
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integral
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 students with high
marks
 only accept in the university.
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belive
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believe
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 that, all students with several
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potentialities
potential ties
potential-ties
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the university. From my perspective both
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aspects
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, but
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identical
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internal
external
 to university with high
marks
 more
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advantage
.
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achieve
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marks
, hard study
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creates
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the
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secondary school
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a successful
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 student and
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pinpoint
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goals
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 grow
with
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 making planes for
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 examps and
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earn
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 in the final,
then
,
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 in the future.
In contrast
, there are students
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and
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others
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 who
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 at some
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subject
subjects
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achieve
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marks
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however
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 do not pass the test
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other topic
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a lot
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mathmatics
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mathematics
, but make well in history, so these
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 should not inhibit from their right.
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shouls
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should
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historical or
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history
teacher
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teachers
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. In
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conclusion
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views
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are important
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 for
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students'
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 future, but
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mark
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create
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committing
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 generation. That,
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 in their psychology
comptitions
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competitions
 and
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ambitious
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coherence cohesion
Improve the organization of your essay by clearly structuring it into paragraphs with distinct points. Ensure each paragraph naturally flows from one to the next.
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Work on providing more detailed examples and elaboration to support your main points. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the main points that will be discussed in the essay. The conclusion should effectively summarize these points and restate your opinion.
task achievement
Focus on avoiding grammatical errors and improving your vocabulary to ensure that your ideas are communicated clearly.
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Try to address both sides of the argument more evenly and balance your discussion to demonstrate a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
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Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, demonstrating an understanding of different perspectives.
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You have a clear opinion and attempt to justify it, which shows an ability to take a stance on an issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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