The line graph illustrates the number of radio and television users throughout a day in 1992.

The line graph illustrates the number of radio and television users throughout a day in 1992.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph illustrates the number of radio and television users throughout a day in 1992.
The line graph illustrates the number of
radio
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and television users throughout
a
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the
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day in 1992. Clearly, people tend to listen to the
radio
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more in the morning than in the afternoon. Over the course of each day and night, more people watched TV than listened to the
radio
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. Less than 10% of people watched TV between 1 AM and 12 noon.
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However
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However,
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by 4 PM,
this
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figure increased rapidly, reaching a peak of almost half the population at 8 PM.
After
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this
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, the graph records a sharp decline in viewers, reaching a low of only a tiny percentage by 3 AM.
Radio
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,
on the other hand
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, shows a very different trend. The most popular time for listeners to be tuned in was just after 8 AM
,
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when around 27% of the population was listening.
After
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this
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brief peak, the numbers dropped steadily to barely 2%, apart from fluctuations around 4 PM and 10:30 PM. The percentage of listeners remained low overnight before beginning a rapid ascent from 6 AM to the 8 AM high.
Overall
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, television viewership dominates the afternoon and evening hours,
while
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radio
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listeners
peaks
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peak
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in the morning, illustrating distinct usage patterns for these two media throughout the day.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words radio with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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