The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit,during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit,during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the counts of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after progress. The pie chart presents the results of visitor's satisfaction.
Overall
, In comparison with before and after refurbishment high number of people visited the museum after the development and
also
majority of them were satisfied with the new improvement.
According to
the first pie chart,
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dissatisfied, which is the highest response,30% of visitors are satisfied with the progress and which is the second highest.
Moreover
, very satisfied and very dissatisfied accounted for 15% and 10% respectively,
In addition
, there were 5% of visitors did not give their responses to the survey.
Secondly
, In comparison with before development, there are public's responses increased by 10% in the new evolution, meanwhile very satisfied doubled to 35% approximately.
Further
, very dissatisfied and no responses were equal to 5%.
Moreover
,
according to
the table after the development, the museum's visitor count was increased to 18000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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