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Many argue that globalization has significantly contributed to economic growth and cultural exchange, while others believe it has led to increased inequality and the erosion of local traditions. What is your opinion on the impact of globalization? Do you think it is a force for positive change or does it pose more challenges than benefits? Support your viewpoint with relevant examples and experiences.

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It is a common thought among a large group of people that
globalisation
 has dramatically helped the economy and aided in cultural appreciation
while
 others believe that its negative impact outweighs the positives.
This
 essay is of the opinion that globalization is a progressive change since it has made the
world
 we live in a more comfortable place.
Globalisation
 has shrunk the
world
 and has made it possible to experience various traditions , foods , ideas , art and literature without having to travel across several countries. Humans have always been curious creatures and before the advent of globalization there was no way of knowing what was going on in other regions of the
world
, but because of it, we get to fully experience the
world
 as a whole and it's one of our major achievements.
For instance
 , an Indian gets to eat kiwi that was bought from his local market which would not have been possible years ago as it is not a native fruit.
Globalisation
 has
also
 greatly boosted our economy by enhancing our trading practices. It has created an extremely interesting demand and supply pattern which has benefited a large number of businessmen around the
world
.
For example
, packed vegetables are exported from Tamil Nadu as it is an agriculture-based state to various cold regions where
such
 foods
cant
Correct your spelling
can't
 be cultivated and it provides food to both the parties involved. In conclusion, even though
globalisation
 has led to injustice and the loss of valuable traditions, it has more benefits than downsides.
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Task Achievement
To improve your Task Achievement score, ensure that your essay fully addresses all parts of the task. While you have presented a clear opinion and relevant examples, expanding on the negative aspects of globalization could provide a more balanced view. This would show a deeper understanding of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly. Though your essay has a logical structure, varying your connectors and starting sentences in different ways can make your writing flow even better.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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