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The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other's countries in 2011.

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other's countries in 2011.
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The following diagram compares
amount
Add an article
the amount
show examples
 of
people
 from five different
country
Change to a plural noun
countries
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 in Europe living in each other's state in 2011.
Overall
, during
this
 one-year period,
Germany
remained
Verb problem
had
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 the highest index, Italian nations show the
number
 of
people
 who live in
Germany
,
as well as
on
Change preposition
in
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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second place the degree of
people
 Polish
people
live
Wrong verb form
living
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 in Britain. In Polish all statements
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
show examples
 the lowest indicators with
total
Correct article usage
a total
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number
six
Change preposition
of six
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 thousand
people
. It is interesting to note that the total
number
whose
Correct pronoun usage
who
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 lived abroad only Polish nation was higher
one
Change preposition
than one
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 million.
However
, there were only a small
number
 of
people
 from
another country
Fix the agreement mistake
other countries
show examples
 who
live
Wrong verb form
lived
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 in Poland complete degree was 6000
people
. The gap in spending between
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
 5 states had widened and considerably more public were live in
Germany
 summary 1198000. As can be seen from the graph, the amount of rate was 3298000 humanity. The basis of the table consisted only of
Germany
 and Britain
due to
 their accrual.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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