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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it is a positive trend while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both points and give your own opinion.

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Scientists believe that
computers
 will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it is a positive trend
while
 others think it is a negative
development
. Discuss both points and give your own opinion. Thesis statement:
although
 highly intelligent
computers
 can assist humans in many ways, I am apprehensive about
this
development
. -> từ vựng ko rõ ràng, phải viết rõ
development
 nào/ Chưa trả lời cho discuss both points ->
This
 essay will first examine the benefits and risks of the appearance of superb
computers
, and I
would
Wrong verb form
will
show examples
 later argue that the
development
 of
such
computers
 can cause serious problems for humankind.
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task achievement
To improve task achievement, make sure to fully explore and balance both sides of the argument with more detailed supporting points or examples. This will enhance the depth and completeness of your essay.
coherence cohesion
In order to boost coherence and cohesion, use clear transition phrases and ensure that each paragraph flows logically into the next. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
introduction conclusion
The thesis statement in the introduction has been improved to clearly state the topics to be discussed and gives the writer's opinion, which makes it easier for the reader to understand the essay's direction.
logical structure
The structure of the essay is logical, with a clear beginning, middle, and end. This organization helps in presenting the argument effectively.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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