The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table graphs illustrate the differences in ownership of electrical machines and the
amount
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number
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of
hours
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spent on housework in
households
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in one country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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of all three appliances used by
households
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increased significantly.
While
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the amount of time per household decreased gradually over the entire period. In terms of electrical appliances, the
percentage
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of
households
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used
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that used
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refrigerators grew dramatically from 0% to 80% in 1960,
by
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and by
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2019 it had increased to 100%.
While
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the
percentage
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of washing machines used by
households
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started at 40% which is more than the
percentage
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of vacuum cleaners it was around 30%, but by 1980, it had changed to ( under 70% and about 80% respectively). In the
last
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year, the number of people who used vacuum cleaners was similar to refrigerators about exactly 100%,
whereas
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the
percentage
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of individuals
used
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who used
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washing machines reached just above 70%.
On the other hand
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, the number of
hours
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of housework per week and per person started at 50
hours
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per week in 1920,
then
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it dropped gradually to 10
hours
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in 2019.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, households, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • amount of time
  • housework
  • households
  • significantly
  • increased
  • decreased
  • majority
  • refrigerators
  • washing machines
  • televisions
  • advanced
  • dishwashers
  • air conditioning units
  • average
  • tasks
  • cooking
  • cleaning
  • laundry
  • availability
  • easier
  • faster
  • evolution
  • impact
  • distribution
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