The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year. Revenue Sources Donated Food 86.6% Other Income 0.4% Expenditures Program Services 95.8% Government Community Investment Grants 0.2% Contributions Income Fundraising 2.6% 10.4% Program 0.2% Management and General Revenue 2.2% Total $53,561,580 1.6% Total $53,224,896

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.

Revenue Sources

Donated Food 86.6%

Other

Income 0.4%

Expenditures

Program Services 95.8%

Government

Community

Investment Grants

0.2%

Contributions

Income

Fundraising 2.6%

10.4% Program 0.2%

Management and General

Revenue

2.2%

Total $53,561,580

1.6%

Total $53,224,896
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of the total at 86.6 per cent .
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and management and general are the smallest , each under 2%.
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