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Many people say that we have developed into a “throw-away” culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend reducing this problem ?

#people #“throw-away” #culture #environment #plastic #bags #rubbish #measures
Numerous
people
 say that
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society has adapted into a "throw-away" culture,
due to
 the usage of plastic bags that
pollutes
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 the environment at the same time
people
 are unable to properly
dispose
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 those plastics. I fully agree
on
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 the label of
this
 society becoming a "consume and dispose" tradition and I will discuss
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solutions that may be able to
implement
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 to help lessen the problem. Consumers use plastic
bag
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bags
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 on day to day basis
such
 as
container
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containers
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 and
organizer
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 yet the problem falls on the aftercare of the environment.
First,
the local government must implement regulation on the use of plastics, in order to encourage
people
 to utilize other forms of
container
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containers
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 that are
environemental-friendly
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environmental-friendly
environmentally-friendly
.
For example
,
people
 can utilize basket nets, paper bags,
nylon-bags
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 and other materials that are basically reusable. For
this
 regulation to be a success, incentives must be given to the rule-abiding citizen.
Second,
the local authorities must promote environmental education to the consumers. For
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 they may have seminars, forums and local groups to make the
people
 more involved and knowledgeable on the issue. To sum it up, I strongly believe
the
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society has become
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a consumer-centered
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consumer-centered
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consumer-centred
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individuals
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 yet there are possible ways the government may
do to
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help the environment.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disposable products
  • convenience-focused consumer habits
  • single-use plastics
  • fast fashion
  • environmental impact
  • landfill waste
  • pollution
  • harm to wildlife
  • recycling infrastructure
  • decomposition
  • public awareness
  • sustainable living practices
  • governmental regulations
  • biodegradable materials
  • recycling technologies
  • sustainable packaging solutions
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