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The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and post graduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the change that happened in the period 2008 among graduates and postgraduates later relieved from UK universities by excluding the full-time workers.
Overall
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, The volume of students who participated in graduation showed the highest involvement in all activities
such
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 as part-time jobs, voluntary
work
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,
further
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study
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 and unemployment,
while
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 post-
study
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study
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 sharply declined through the year and
subsequently
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 did not exceed the lowest count of voluntary
work
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 in graduate activity. The majority of juniors were given higher priority to
further
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study
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 which peaked at 29665 in the year 2008.
Moreover
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, the second most popular was part-time reached till 17,735.
Additionally
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, the amount of unemployment rose to 16235 slightly less than half-day employment.
Nevertheless
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, voluntary
work
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 displays the least significant undeveloped field around 3500 proportional to other sectors. After all, postgraduate interest in sectors other than full-time represented the least contribution throughout the year. In the meantime,none of them ever exceeded the lowest bothered voluntary
work
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 in the graduate list but the one that reached the highest level was the
further
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study
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 category (2725). Rest all made up the lowest size including part-time , unemployment and voluntary
work
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 to 2535, 1621, and 345 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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