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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities, which are played alone. Do you agree or disagree?

#team #activities #skills #life
It is often agreed that people can acquire a great deal of
skills
 from
team
 activities. Even if it does not appeal to me at all. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and I think that people
also
 can be great skilful by Solely. First of all, as we know
skills
 only come from diligently hard work with long-term patients. In order to be a skilful person, definitely we have to spend time solely on study or work and it
also
 matters what types of environments we choose for study or work so that we can think deeply, solve sophisticated
problems
 and so on.
This
 is why the majority of people are self-reliant: and like to do anything by themselves without a helping hand from the group.
For example
, some students, nowadays, often face a lot of
problems
 in their daily lives but they can able to solve these kinds of
problems
 by using the Internet
instead
 of making a
team
, where all
problems
 have solutions available.
Secondly
, there are many competitions usually held by both teams and individuals. Individual learning methods and
team
 learning methods both are different. On the one hand, a cricket
team
 has 11 players, and
while
 they play with an opponent
team
, all those players have to same thing to win the match, but each and every player has a personal trainer to learn
skills
.
On the other hand
, badminton games are played by one with an opponent player, so the individual person has to play and think solely. Both types of players have crucial rules and regulations where they represent their
skills
. So, individual
skills
 are most important. In conclusion, I strongly believe that individual activities are most important for a person to do something in life.
However
, some
skills
 accumulate from
team
 working or study which are
also
 vital for us in life.
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Ensure that your introduction clearly expresses your opinion. While you state disagreement, your wording can be clearer and more engaging.
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Work on providing more specific and relevant examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and make your essay more convincing.
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Revise and improve the logical flow of your ideas. Try to make smoother transitions between points to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
You included an introduction and conclusion, which provide a clear structure to your essay.
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You attempted to address both sides of the argument, which is good for a balanced perspective.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • leadership
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • belonging
  • learning from others
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
  • personal reflection
  • introspection
  • independence
  • self-reliance
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