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The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.

The pie charts give information about the three various elements (carbohydrates, protein and fat) of three meal plans, namely an average diet, a healthy diet and a healthy diet for sport.
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The bar chart provided
a
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apply
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different categories,
carbohydrates
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, protein,and fat,which
as
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an
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 average
diet
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, a healthy
diet
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 and a healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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.
This
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 report will
discusse
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discuss
 and
analysis
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the
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both
side
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sides
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.
Overall
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,
carbohydrates
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was
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 the highest in the three aspects,
Although
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 the fast was the lowest in
three
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the three
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 areas.
According to
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 overhead, fast was the lowest in the healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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 with
percentage
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a percentage
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15
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of 15
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%, rather than
was remain
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remained
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 steady in the two aspects average
diet
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, healthy
diet
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 by 20%.
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Otherwise
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carbohydrates
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was
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were
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 in the healthy
diet
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 for
sport
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 with 60%, as an
illustration
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 the two factors
was
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were
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 40% in
healthy
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the healthy
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diet
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,
also
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decline
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 10% in the other area.
On the other hand
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,
the
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protein
take
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the
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second place in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 by 30%,
although
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in
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apply
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the average
diet
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graduallly
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gradually
increase
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increases
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 an amount
10
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by 10
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%,
therefore
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take
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taking
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 third place in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 for
sport
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 by
fell
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15%. In the final
carbohydrates
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 take the peak in three areas.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrates, diet, sport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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