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The pie graph depicts what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table provides information about the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The pie graph depicts what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table provides information about the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie graph depicts what Anthropology
graduates
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 from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table provides information about the salaries of the anthropologists in
work
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 after five years.
Overall
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,
while
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 the proportion of
graduates
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 working full-time has the highest
rate
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, the ratio of
graduates
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 working part-time and studying postgraduate has the lowest
rate
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.
Furthermore
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, the salaries of Anthropology
graduates
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 after five years of
work
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 show differences.
Firstly
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, almost half of the
students
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 are working full-time
work
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, the remaining half are divided into five different parts. The number of
students
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 at part-time
work
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 has a percentage of 15%, and
unemployed
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has
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 12%.
Students
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 working full-time postgraduate study and those not known have the same
rate
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 of 8%.
Additionally
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, the number of
students
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 working part-time
work
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 and postgrad study has the lowest ratio of 5%.
On the other hand
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, salaries of Anthropology
graduates
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 are divided into 3 categories.
While
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 the type of employment is in Freelance consultants with 40% of the highest salary
rate
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 of $75,000-99,999 and $100,000+, it belongs to $100,000+ with 50% in
government
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the government
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 sector, and it belongs to $50,000-74,999 with 35% in private companies.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work, rate, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "divided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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