The following process diagram describes how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.

The following process diagram describes how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.
The given diagram shows how
greenhouse
gases catch
energy
from the Sun.
Overall
, the linear, cyclical
and
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man-made,
half natural
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half-natural
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process starts with releasing
heat
and ends with trapping the
energy
,
moreover
, there are some materials which are the Sun, vehicles and factories and
also
, some steps, some resources
carbon
dioxide
, sunlight and
heat
in
heat trapping
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heat-trapping
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by
greenhouse
gases. In the first part of the process, solar
energy
from the Sun reaches the Earth, with some of
this
energy
being reflected off the atmosphere by clouds and radiated back into space.
However
, a larger portion of
this
energy
passes through the atmosphere and is absorbed by the land.
This
absorbed
energy
is
then
converted into
heat
. In the second part, the
heat
radiated by the Earth is caught by
greenhouse
gases
such
as
carbon
dioxide
. Human activities,
such
as the burning of fossil fuels by vehicles and industrial processes, release additional
carbon
dioxide
into the atmosphere making
with
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it
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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effect.
Moreover
, deforestation
further
contributes to
this
problem by reducing the number of trees that can absorb
carbon
dioxide
.
As a result
, more
heat
is trapped, leading to an increase in global temperatures.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words greenhouse, energy, heat, carbon, dioxide with synonyms.
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