The following process diagram describes how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.

The following process diagram describes how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.
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The given diagram shows how
greenhouse
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gases catch
energy
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from the Sun.
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, the linear, cyclical
and
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apply
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man-made,
half natural
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process starts with releasing
heat
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and ends with trapping the
energy
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,
moreover
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, there are some materials which are the Sun, vehicles and factories and
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, some steps, some resources
carbon
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dioxide
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, sunlight and
heat
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in
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heat trapping
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heat-trapping
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by
greenhouse
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gases. In the first part of the process, solar
energy
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from the Sun reaches the Earth, with some of
this
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energy
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being reflected off the atmosphere by clouds and radiated back into space.
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, a larger portion of
this
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energy
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passes through the atmosphere and is absorbed by the land.
This
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absorbed
energy
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is
then
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converted into
heat
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. In the second part, the
heat
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radiated by the Earth is caught by
greenhouse
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gases
such
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as
carbon
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dioxide
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. Human activities,
such
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as the burning of fossil fuels by vehicles and industrial processes, release additional
carbon
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dioxide
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into the atmosphere making
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it
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greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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effect.
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, deforestation
further
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contributes to
this
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problem by reducing the number of trees that can absorb
carbon
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dioxide
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.
As a result
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, more
heat
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is trapped, leading to an increase in global temperatures.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words greenhouse, energy, heat, carbon, dioxide with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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