Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. Given time, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays technology is taking over the world, It interferes with human daily lives

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there are considers that technologies will replace teachers in

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schools,In my opinion,Education is a thing that

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human minds,

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of student chose them over technology,

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some people have self issues and do not prefer being with other,In that

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technology is a better method

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,The cost of education will go down,

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to invest much more money for improving schools and colleges,But would

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be enough to abandon human

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and more Ai teachers,

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without human

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part of the world,by understanding how their minds work they could teach other,on the

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deep knowledge of human brains,

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could save more money by

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them less task to do,after 100 years or more it could be so,but not in the near future.

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The essay contains relevant points regarding technology in education and the role of human teachers. These points are crucial for developing your argument.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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3 paragraphs

230 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

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Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. Given time, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

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“How plastic bottles are recycled?” The recycling of plastic bottles is a comprehensive process that turns discarded materials into new, usable products.

It is important for people to take risks, both in professional lives and personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

Although it is generally illegal, physical punishment continues in many countries. Some argue that parents should have the right to punish their children in this way. Do you agree or disagree?