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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them with this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviors to children?

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It is essential part for
children
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 to understand the worg and the righ behaviours from
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 young age,punishment could be
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 to help them realize their mistakes,their are a lot of tipes of
punishments
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 and not all of them would be helpful for
children
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,In mi opinion,young people shoud understand the right and the wrong methods to do thing,
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 it is hard for them to learn how to behave when they get older,
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 could sometimes handle the way their
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 behave stranger will get upset easily by them,How ever their a certain type of human love childrens,the education process needs to start from
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 a young age accroding to exprets,people with young age are more likely to learn compare with adults,
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 there are experts encouraging using
punishments
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 for bad behaves they are other devoting to handle the situation with other methods,
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 like talking with the child or make them fix what the done wrong,If a child learn how to adjust their mistakse and fix them why should
parents
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use
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punishments
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 not all
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capable
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 of that,there are some young people
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 not listen to their
parents
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,So there is a
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scale
 for allowed
punishments
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 to
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 with them,
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 their phone away,
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 off the tv and
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 them fix what they did wrong,
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 not all the
punishments
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 should be
allowd
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allowed
 and not all of them could solve the issues,
Parents
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 have to
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be
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 with the way they punish their
children
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 so that they could handle the problems without making a new
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up
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parents
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 should teach their child how to act,
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 they need to put
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 line between good and bad behaviour,Punishment could
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use
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 only if they were needed,Not all punishment could be allowed to
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coverage
The essay attempts to address all parts of the task by discussing the necessity of teaching children right and wrong and the types of punishment that could be used.

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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