Studies have shown that most criminals have low levels of education. Because of this many believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate prisoners so they can get a job after being released. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, studies have illustrated that most criminals do not have enough level of education,
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or knowledge to start working. Correct your spelling
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positively
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a recent study, in order to support only one prison in the US, millions of dollars are needed annually.
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