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The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.

The maps below show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.
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The two maps display the Kimsville
town
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's recent changes in 2002 and the present day.
Overall
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, by looking at the two maps
it is clear that
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 Kimsville
town
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 was greener in 2002. Over the period, the
town
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 was totally transformed with the addition of new buildings;
however
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, the north-east and the south-east appear to have been relatively unchanged. The trees in the north-west of the
town
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 were cleared and new apartments were developed. The shopping
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center
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 which is located in the north of the
city
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center
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 remained the same. The factory which is located in the east of the
city
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 was demolished and replaced with a software company. To the west of the
city
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center
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 a new train station was constructed. The old cinema which is in the south of the
city
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center
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 was converted
to
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 a pub. In the south-west, trees were
cut-down
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cut down
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 and a football stadium was developed.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, center, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • commercial facilities
  • economic growth
  • population expansion
  • employment opportunities
  • transportation infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • environmental conservation
  • industrial areas
  • urban development
  • transformation
  • relocation
  • quality of life
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