Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

The issue of what
student
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should wear at
schools
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school
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is debatable as some people prefer
school
uniforms
while
others prefer casual clothes.
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essay agrees with the policy of wearing
school
uniforms
because
uniforms
promote
sense
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of equality and they are more decent. I support academic institutions that require
school
uniforms
because
uniforms
makes
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every student look the same thereby promoting equality among students, they will not judge each other by what they are wearing.
This
clearly
close
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the social
gape
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between the students from rich families and poor families since everyone is forced to wear
same
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clothes.
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, no one would come wearing
expensive
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brands than the other and there will be no looking down upon each other,
this
will promote a healthy learning environment. More importantly,
school
uniforms
encourage decent dressing.
Uniforms
are designed in a decent way, the type of material used does not expose every detail of the body and they
also
come in decent lengths.
For instance
,
uniforms
does
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not show cleavage, they do not have vents or slits and they do not have features that are
gang related
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.
This
best
save
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the idea of a decent child going to learn,
therefore
casting out all kinds of
distruction
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destruction
. In conclusion, I strongly support the policy of wearing
school
uniforms
because it provides a good learning environment for students by promoting equality and decent physical presentation.
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