Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
The issue of what
student
should wear at Fix the agreement mistake
students
schools
is debatable as some people prefer Fix the agreement mistake
school
school
uniforms
while
others prefer casual clothes. This
essay agrees with the policy of wearing school
uniforms
because uniforms
promote sense
of equality and they are more decent.
I support academic institutions that require Add an article
a sense
school
uniforms
because uniforms
makes
every student look the same thereby promoting equality among students, they will not judge each other by what they are wearing. Change the verb form
make
This
clearly close
the social Change the verb form
closes
gape
between the students from rich families and poor families since everyone is forced to wear Correct your spelling
gap
same
clothes. Correct article usage
the same
For example
, no one would come wearing expensive
brands than the other and there will be no looking down upon each other, Correct quantifier usage
more expensive
this
will promote a healthy learning environment.
More importantly, school
uniforms
encourage decent dressing. Uniforms
are designed in a decent way, the type of material used does not expose every detail of the body and they also
come in decent lengths. For instance
, uniforms
does
not show cleavage, they do not have vents or slits and they do not have features that are Change the verb form
do
gang related
. Add a hyphen
gang-related
This
best save
the idea of a decent child going to learn, Correct subject-verb agreement
saves
therefore
casting out all kinds of distruction
.
In conclusion, I strongly support the policy of wearing Correct your spelling
destruction
school
uniforms
because it provides a good learning environment for students by promoting equality and decent physical presentation.Submitted by sisalt100 on
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task achievement
The essay presents a definite position on school uniforms, clearly supporting the argument with relevant points.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are effectively used to frame the argument, providing clarity and a sense of completeness.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains clarity throughout, ensuring that each main point is supported and contributes to the overall argument.
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