The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts compare the average percentages of three types of nutrients – namely
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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consumed in four typical meals in the USA.
It is clear that
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sodium
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and saturated fat are the mainstays of lunch, and added
sugar
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is the mainstay of snacks.
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, breakfast shows the lowest rates for all three foods. Dinners account for 43% of your daily
sodium
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intake. It
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contains 37% of saturated fat and 23% of added
sugar
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. Lunch, which is the second-largest source, is 29%
sodium
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and 26% saturated fat, representing more than a quarter of the 3 types of nutrients.
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, added
sugar
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makes up the smallest part of lunch and is only 19%. The highest percentage of snacks is added
sugar
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(42%).
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, they are relatively low in
sodium
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and saturated fat, at 14 and 21%, respectively.
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, breakfast provides the lowest proportions of all calories, at 14% for
sodium
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and 16% for both saturated fat and added
sugar
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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