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You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter • Explain what type of car you would like • Give details of when you would like the car • Request more information about the cost

#rent #car #holiday #agency #type #request #information #cost
Good morning, dear sir/madam. I have
listened
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 a lot of hot recommendations about your agency. I want to rent a
car
 with your help for our family vacation. I'll arrive
to
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in
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you
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your
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 city with my family on Friday, August
15-th
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15th
,
in
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at
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 2 pm. I'm curious to know if it is possible to get a
car
in
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at
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 the airport, or
I
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if I
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have to appear in your central office? First of all, let me, please, to
discribe
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describe
 my dream
car
 for
this
 vacation. We need
minivan
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a minivan
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, bright light,
manual
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and manual
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 gear.
Moreover
, it's very important for us
the
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a
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 big trunk.
Secondly
, I wanted to get your price list (
includes
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 the insurance for two drivers) if you have a
car
 which meets my wishes. Best regards, Anastassia.
Submitted by anastasia on

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task achievement
Try to avoid small grammatical mistakes such as 'listened' instead of 'heard' and 'discribe' instead of 'describe.'
coherence cohesion
Ensure to use more cohesive devices to make the text flow smoothly between ideas.
task achievement
Clear and polite request, making it easy for the rental agency to understand the needs.
coherence cohesion
Good structure with a clear greeting and closing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedan
  • SUV
  • convertible
  • GPS
  • child seats
  • air conditioning
  • pick-up and drop-off times
  • extended rental periods
  • one-way rentals
  • daily rental rates
  • insurance
  • deposits
  • additional charges
  • late returns
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