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You are a student living in university accommodation. The heating has not worked for some time. Write a letter to the management. In your letter Explain why you complain; Describe the problems Tell what you want them to do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to bring to your notice that
heating
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the heating
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 system is not working properly in my room in
university
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the university
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 hostel. The heating system is not fully functional in my room. It is affecting my studies and exam preparation as my next
semester
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semester's
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 exams are going
to begin
from
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apply
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next month.
Furthermore
,
geyser
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the geyser
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 in
bathroom
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the bathroom
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 is not working. I might get cold because of
this
.
From
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last
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the last
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 two
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months
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month
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month,
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 I
am
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have been
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 complaining to
hostel
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the hostel
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 warden about
this
,
still
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 no action has been taken by them. Every time I
am getting
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get
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same
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 reply that they are working on it.
Therefore
, I am requesting you to kindly
repaired
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repair
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 it from electricians on
immediate
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an immediate
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 basis. The electrician will be able to diagnose the problem and may suggest possible
solution
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solutions
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 for the issue. He will be
also
 able to check
heating
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the heating
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 system temperature control. I look forward to your prompt reply. Yours faithfully, Martin Smith
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coherence cohesion
In the body paragraphs, try to organize your thoughts more clearly. For example, you could combine the issues with the heating system and the geyser into one paragraph, and the history of your complaints into another.
task achievement
Ensure there is a conclusion that summarizes your complaints and states your request again. This will make the letter more coherent and structured.
coherence cohesion
The letter appropriately addresses the recipient and ends with a polite closing, which is suitable for a formal letter.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and respectful, which is suitable for a formal complaint.
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