The chart below shows the results of a European survey into young people's expectations for change in five different areas of life in the next 20 years. They were asked if they thought things would improve or get worse.

The chart below shows the results of a European survey into young people's expectations for change in five different areas of life in the next 20 years. They were asked if they thought things would improve or get worse.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The chart shows a contraction of young individuals' options in various aspects
in
Change preposition
of in
show examples
Europe,the upcoming couple of decades
Overall
, as stated by the survey, youngsters believe almost all aspects will get worse, except interpersonal communication would enhanced. In the survey, more young participants
are expecting
Wrong verb form
expect
show examples
communication among the people would improve
while
others share their negative opinions, respectively 54 % and 46%. In spite of more youngster-supported communication. More and more responders are pessimistic about the
quality
of air getting worse only a small percentage of them are optimistic about it, respectively 77% and 23%. Options on
quality
of food is a challenging topic because half of youngster says
quality
of meal will improve in future, Meanwhile, other half says
quality
foods will get worse than now, their percentage respectively 49% and 51%. Similarity
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
occurred about health majority of young anticipated that the health system would be bad,
While
3 out 5 participants
are
Wrong verb form
were
show examples
optimistic about
this
aspect.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words quality with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: