Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or diagree with this opinion?

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hatred and resentment among players .
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You should aim to provide more detailed and specific examples. This helps in clearly illustrating your points and making them more convincing. For instance, when discussing how events can enhance international relations, refer to specific instances where this has happened.
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