Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Speaking
foreign
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a foreign
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language
rather than
native
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a native
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language
in
different
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country
might be a problem for individuals
such
as socializing.
This
essay agrees with
this
statement because
people
speak more smoothly in their own
language
thus
they
expain
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explain
their
idea
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ideas
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directly.
Also
, they speak faster in their native
language
it is
more simple
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simpler
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that
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and
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create
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creates
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social
bounds
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bonds
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.
Firstly
, being advanced level in
second
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a second
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language
might take time years.
Thus
, bilingual
people
generally cannot show their ideas
straightly
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straight
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. Because they have to translate their opinion to
foreign
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a foreign
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language
.
For instance
,
people
who try to
getting
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used to
new
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a new
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country
and
they
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apply
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try to figure out
paper work
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paperwork
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can face
to
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apply
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very difficult
situation
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situations
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due to
communication
problem
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problems
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. Some
pratical
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practical
problems always remain if
people
cannot improve their
language
skills.
Secondly
,
today's
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in today's
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world
people
tend to be more impatient and they do not want to wait for somebody's opinion. Every
individuals
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have
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has
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rush
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a rush
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and each one
have
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has
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a
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an
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adult responsibility. Even
people
that
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who
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go to
cafe
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cafes
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for socializing
is
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are
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not open
for
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to
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new
friendship
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friendships
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especially
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, especially
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a
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in a
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new
country
. Because they
have
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do have
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not much leisure time and they might
be
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not enough energy
for listening
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to listen
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to
stranger
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strangers
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. My
colloge
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college
collage
friends
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friend
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went to the USA 4 years ago and she
had
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told me that she was very upset because of not being able to make
friendship
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friends
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.
To sum up
, I believe that living
a
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in a
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foreign
country
and
do
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not able to speak
propberly
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properly
cause
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causes
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some problems
such
as
human's
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human
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relationship
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relationships
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and life
practice
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practices
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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