1.You would like to invite your friend from abroad to a public event in your country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter odescribe the public event oexplain why you think he/she would like the event owrite how you can help your friend with accommodation

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Dear Gagan, Hope you are doing splendidly! I'm writing

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letter to invite you to India for a cultural event which is in August 2024. Let me explain

you

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to you

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about the

occassion

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occasion

, it is a collaboration of all the festivals our country

have

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. People from all over the world will come to participate and will exhibit the

truthness

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. There will be stalls of local famous foods

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as samosa, jalebi, and pav bhaji.

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, you can buy hand-made stuff like clothes, shoes and

painting

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from the fair.

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this

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, some famous musicians and

singer

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will perform to make it more interesting. Now the question is why you will enjoy it? So buddy, as you're far away from

country

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the country

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and

its

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been nights since we

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together.

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, you will get a chance to meet all

the

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friends and family.

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, you will enjoy eatables.

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, your favourite artist Karan Aujla will organise a show. You will be over the moon once you enjoy

everythink

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everything

and will thank me later.

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, please

donot

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do not

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a place to stay. If you have no objection you can stay at my home

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I will book a hotel room. Hopefully, you will join me for

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special day. See you soon. Your friend, Waris

sunnytalwan065Thu Aug 01 2024

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task achievement

You have addressed all parts of the task well. However, ensure that your reasons why your friend would like the event are clearly organized and not repetitive for better clarity.

coherence cohesion

To further improve the logical structure, consider breaking down longer sentences or combining shorter related ones to enhance readability.

task achievement

A warm and friendly tone has been maintained throughout the letter.

coherence cohesion

Your email begins with a lovely greeting and ends with a nice closing, creating a very friendly and welcoming atmosphere for your friend.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

212 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

public event
cultural festival
annual
spectacular
performance
exhibition
recurring event
one-time occasion
attraction
highlight
interest
hobby
unique experience
local culture
accommodation
stay
recommend
bookings
transportation
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