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The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart compares data about the figure of 3 various computer packages which were downloaded from the
internet
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 per 5 different weeks.
Overall
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, it was important that the trend of all items which used the
Internet
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 has increased;
moreover
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, Active X utilized more
Internet
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instead
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 of the Net.
According to
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 the graph, Active X, the main thing that used a lot of nets, the first time was 70 ;
then
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 it climbed significantly to 110 in
week
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 3;
however
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, it reached 100 in
week
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 4, but jumped moderately to 125 in
week
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 5.
In addition
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, at the start , Java, the second one, was 50;
thereafter
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, it leapt slightly to nearly 85 in the
last
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week
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. The diagram demonstrates the third one which used less
Internet
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 than others was Net;
additionally
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, at the beginning, it was 30;
furthermore
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,
in contrast
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 to other fashions dipped marginally to 20 which was the nadir;
nevertheless
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, it surged somewhat to roughly 50 in weeks5.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, week with synonyms.
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