More and more people are leaving countryside to live in cities. Do more advantages or disadvantages of this development for environment.

In recent times,
influx
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people
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of people
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are
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has
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moving
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moved
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from rural to urban
areas
.
Although
, relocating to cities
have
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has
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some downsides,
However
, I believe
advantages
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the advantages
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overweigh
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outweigh
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the disadvantages of
this
trend as now will be explained. To commence with, moving to cities can majorly upgrade
standard
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the standard
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of living of residents. Urban
areas
provide all
amenities
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the amenities
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required to live in
this
advanced technological world.
For instance
, parents these days do not hesitate to move their children for higher education in cities as it is believed that educational institutes situated in urban
areas
are far more reputed.
Consequently
, it enables
high
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a high
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literacy rate and employment rate.
Moreover
,
better
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a better
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style of living
such
as medical facilities, waste and waste disposal, rich infrastructure and
good
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a good
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transport system can be expected
while
living in metropolitan
areas
. Another benefit of moving can be vast companies offering employment opportunities.
On the contrary
, there are some downsides
also
. Large people relocating to urban
areas
cause heavy population and traffic jams.
Need
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to
expansion of
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expand
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urban
areas
due to
increase
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the increase
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in population is directly associated with land cutting and deforestation.
Such
activities have become debatable issues these days and harm the environment and
mother earth
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Mother Earth
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.
Also
, disruption to nature causes many diseases and other related environmental issues on which
government
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the government
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needs to take strict actions.
For instance
, these urban
areas
have become heavily crowded and people go back to countryside
areas
to
get
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apply
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relax from the chaos which may not be available very soon in future.
To conclude
this
, though there are some downsides
of
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to
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this
trend, In my opinion, merits have an edge over demerits and the considerable reason for
this
can be access to a better and
high
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higher
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standard of living by residents.
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  • urbanization
  • ecosystems
  • economies of scale
  • public transportation
  • reforestation
  • rewilding
  • biodiversity
  • pollution
  • waste production
  • habitat destruction
  • fragmentation
  • traditional agricultural practices
  • sustainable
  • recycling
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