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Writing Samples
Band 6

You would like to rent a car for a holiday. Write to the car rental agency. In your letter • Explain what type of car you would like • Give details of when you would like the car • Request more information about the cost

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to ask you to arrange a rental
car
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 to travel to Paris ,on the next week. First of all, My family and I are going to travel to Paris from Barcelona. During our
trip
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trip,
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 we would like to discover virgin natural areas.
therefore
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, we decided to rent a
car
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. You are kindly requested to consider a sedan new
car
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 equipped with
air
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an air
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 conditioning system and GPS.
More over
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Moreover
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, I appreciate it if you provide us with a
child-seat
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child seat
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 for my
5 year old
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5-year-old
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 daughter. I will pick up the
car
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 from one of your deputies in Barcelona on July 10th and deliver it
in
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to
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 your agency in Paris on July 14th.
In addition
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,
although
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 I have seen the rental cost
in
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on
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 your website, I would be so thankful if you provide me with
the
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a
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 breakdown of
cost
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the cost
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.
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, I would like to know more about insurance
cost
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costs
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. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, ZM

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single idea per paragraph
Consider breaking down longer sentences into shorter ones for better readability.
logical structure
To improve logical structure, ensure smooth transitions between different sections of your letter.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are both polite and appropriately formal.
complete response
The letter provides a clear explanation of the type of car needed, dates for rental, and a request for more cost details, fulfilling the task requirements well.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is suitable and polite for a formal request.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedan
  • SUV
  • convertible
  • GPS
  • child seats
  • air conditioning
  • pick-up and drop-off times
  • extended rental periods
  • one-way rentals
  • daily rental rates
  • insurance
  • deposits
  • additional charges
  • late returns
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