The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps show the
city
of Nelson in 2000 and in the present day. Use synonyms
Overall
, the maps show a huge development Linking Words
of
the Change preposition
in
city
of Nelson with significantly more facilities now.
Use synonyms
Firstly
, the Linking Words
university
has Use synonyms
a new halls
of residence located to its left on the map. Correct the article-noun agreement
a new hall
new halls
However
, the train station has been demolished and the new train station has been built in between the Linking Words
university
Use synonyms
whereas
the old station was located to the west of its new location. Linking Words
Secondly
, people can travel by tram from the Linking Words
university
to the Use synonyms
city
Use synonyms
centre
and back since there is a new tramline. The Use synonyms
city
Use synonyms
centre
Use synonyms
also
has bike Linking Words
rental
as well.
Fix the agreement mistake
rentals
Furthermore
, the group of trees next to the Linking Words
university
has been replaced by a new shopping Use synonyms
centre
. Use synonyms
Finally
, in 2000, there used to be a road where cars were allowed in between the Linking Words
city
Use synonyms
centre
and the port but now it has been pedestrianised. Since Use synonyms
this
area is open just for people Linking Words
by
foot, the Change preposition
on
city
of Nelson boosted the port by putting up a restaurant, bars and clubs.Use synonyms
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, university, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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