The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps show the
city
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of Nelson in 2000 and in the present day.
Overall
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, the maps show a huge development
of
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in
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the
city
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of Nelson with significantly more facilities now.
Firstly
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, the
university
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has
a new halls
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a new hall
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of residence located to its left on the map.
However
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, the train station has been demolished and the new train station has been built in between the
university
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whereas
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the old station was located to the west of its new location.
Secondly
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, people can travel by tram from the
university
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to the
city
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centre
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and back since there is a new tramline. The
city
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centre
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also
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has bike
rental
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as well.
Furthermore
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, the group of trees next to the
university
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has been replaced by a new shopping
centre
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.
Finally
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, in 2000, there used to be a road where cars were allowed in between the
city
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centre
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and the port but now it has been pedestrianised. Since
this
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area is open just for people
by
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on
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foot, the
city
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of Nelson boosted the port by putting up a restaurant, bars and clubs.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, university, centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • land use
  • residential
  • commercial
  • green spaces
  • public transport
  • urbanization
  • de-urbanization
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • industrial
  • transformation
  • recent times
  • comparisons
  • notable
  • key features
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