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The chart shows information about various professions in the UK and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.

The chart shows information about various professions in the UK and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession.
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The chart illustrates information about several businesses in the UK and their salaries and the table illustrates the average working
hours
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 weekly for each profession.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the earnings when started are lower than the earnings after
three
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years
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 for four kinds of professions. Remarkably, the underground drivers have the highest income but the average working
hours
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 per
week
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 for firefighters is the highest. We can see that underground drivers who
work
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 36
hours
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 a
week
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 receive a salary when started is 50000
pounds
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 and after
three
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years
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 about 51000
pounds
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;
However
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, firefighters receive a salary when started is 40000
pounds
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 and after
three
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years
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 about 41000
pounds
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 when the average working
hours
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 per
week
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 is 55
hours
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. Regarding Police professions, there is not much difference in salaries when started and after
three
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years
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, each police is paid about 22000
pounds
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 when they
work
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 40
hours
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 per
week
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 on average.
Finally
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, those who
work
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 as nurses receive the lowest pay compared with the remaining
three
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 professions, about 18000
pounds
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 when started and about 19000
pounds
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 after
three
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years
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 if they
work
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 38
hours
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 per
week
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 on average.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, three, years, week, work, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • salary levels
  • disparities
  • correlation
  • average working hours
  • job satisfaction
  • work-life balance
  • earning potential
  • personal time
  • economic impact
  • social impact
  • job demand
  • skill levels
  • broad economy
  • profession
  • community contribution
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