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It is argued that learning the English language in a number of nations in which speaking English is the best

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It is argued that learning the
English
language
 in a
number
 of nations in which speaking
English
 is the best;
however
, not the only way to learn
language
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.
According to
this
 statement, I partly agree and would cast light on it through these passages. On the one hand, learning
English
 in an
English speaking
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 country can not totally improve the knowledge of that
language
. It may be convenient to communicate with foreigners to boost their vocabulary,
gain
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 more knowledge when visiting other countries, especially in England. But some
learners
 have to pay
for
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many
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any
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 fees
such
 as
traveling
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, booking hotels and so forth which cost an arm and leg. All
learners
 can not afford that easily. With the fostering of technology, studying
English
 through a
number
 of well-known online courses may be cheaper,
more
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 convenient for
learners
 to study with many
English
 professionals from well-known universities who can teach them effectively through these online courses.
On the other hand
,
due to
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the chance
of visiting
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 some nations where speaking
English
 is their first
language
 may be useful for
learners
 who want to experience reality. Communicating with a
number
 of foreigners in those countries
which
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can help them gain knowledge not only of
English
vocabularies
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 but
also
 the real experience.
Furthermore
,
besides
 the conversations with foreigners, they can study
English
 in many ways
such
 as going to the market to buy something and it may help them know more about the cost of that goods and learn the
number
 more effectively.
Moreover
, with those who are studying abroad, they may have more chances
in
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 applying to many well-known universities
such
 as Havard, Oxford, Stanford, . . . . In conclusion, people can learn
English
 in many ways, not only in
English speaking
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 nations and these are the realizations of
this
 statement in a hasty way.
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