Some people believe that environmental issues should be the first priority of humanity in the 21th century. To what extent do you agree with the view expressed?

Nowadays, the environment is paid attention
more
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by
human-being
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human beings
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, and recently,
problems
which
have
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co-related
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to
this
are considered as the most important obstacle, which should be solved by nations.
Overall
, I strongly believe that the environment belongs
all
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generation
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from the past to the future, and needs to
pay
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attention
by
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the governments worldwide to pass through the environmental issues. It will be mentioned agreement and disagreement ideas in
this
essay.
According to
the recent environmental issues, which the universe has faced in recent decades, some people believe that they must be considered as a civil right over the world.
For example
, climate change,
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my country has witnessed in
this
century, and prone to drought, not only should be regarded by our authorities, but
also
needs immediate action by all
countries
to use fossil fuels less.
The global
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warming
threats
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threatens
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all creatures, and some ecosystems are endangered. In these
such
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cases, neither the governments nor the environmentalists can safeguard them individually. So, it is expected that
the
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environmental
problems
should be
first
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priority of humanity in the
21th
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century.
On the other hand
, some people believe that we have a lot of crucial
problems
over the world, which are more important,
although
pay
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attention to the environment is necessary.
For example
, we have a lot of nations in Africa, where
they
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do not have access to enough food, educational, and medical services.
In addition
, in other
countries
, especially in developing
countries
,
the
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economics is considered as the first obstacle to
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their nations' lives. They believe the less well-being, they have in life the less worried they are about
the
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nature. In conclusion, it can be mentioned that we cannot ignore the
problems
about solving the
problems
and concerns of the poor, and developed
countries
are responsible for handling these humanitarian activities.
However
,
the
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environmental issues cannot
solve
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in a short period, so I strongly believe that they must be regarded as the first priority by the governments.
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