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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.
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The line graph illustrates the number of citizens moving from rural to urban places in Iran, Indonesia and Russia from 2000 to 2025.
Overall
, all of the nations witnessed a significant increase in
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migration to the big cities.
However
,
Indonesian's
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 movement is expected to remain stable in the future,
whereas
 the two remaining countries will see an ongoing
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 in
this
 area. Starting in 2000, there
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 about 15
millions
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 Russians having an intention of going to the metropolitan areas, which was higher than Indonesian and Iranians, at 10 and 8
millions
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 respectively. Until 2020, the figures for Russia and Iran rose dramatically and
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 approximately 80
millions
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 people in both. By 2050, Iran is predicted to take the first place
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individuals coming to the crowded areas at 95
millions
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, followed by Russians at around 89
millions
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million
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.
Nevertheless
, Indonesians' trend of the movement will stay unchanged at 30
millions
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million
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 people.
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