The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.

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The line graph illustrates the number of citizens moving from rural to urban places in Iran, Indonesia and Russia from 2000 to 2025.

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, all of the nations witnessed a significant increase in

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migration to the big cities.

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Indonesian's

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movement is expected to remain stable in the future,

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the two remaining countries will see an ongoing

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area. Starting in 2000, there

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about 15

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Russians having an intention of going to the metropolitan areas, which was higher than Indonesian and Iranians, at 10 and 8

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respectively. Until 2020, the figures for Russia and Iran rose dramatically and

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approximately 80

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people in both. By 2050, Iran is predicted to take the first place

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individuals coming to the crowded areas at 95

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, followed by Russians at around 89

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, Indonesians' trend of the movement will stay unchanged at 30

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people.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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