The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart shows the results of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart shows the results of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.
Firstly
, I would like to start with the
year
before
refurbishment
we almost have a tie between satisfied and dissatisfied with satisfied being 30 % and dissatisfied 40% , it is a shocker for the dissatisfied to be the highest percentage, that might be a reason for the
refurbishment
. Now moving on to the
year
after
refurbishment
we can easily see a huge improvement
such
as 40% are now satisfied it is like the tables have turned , the second biggest percentage being very satisfied which proves a 100% improvement
then
the
year
before
refurbishment
and even the very dissatisfied were at 10% now thankfully it is only 5%.
Lastly
, the dissatisfaction in the
year
after
refurbishment
dropped down to 25% ,
overall
the positive impact that the
refurbishment
had clearly was a great choice from the Ashdown Museum.
Finally
, everybody can agree even if they were not a part of the people who voted or went to the museum it is very clear by only looking at the chart.
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