The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart shows the results of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.
Firstly
, I would like to start with the year
before refurbishment
we almost have a tie between satisfied and dissatisfied with satisfied being 30 % and dissatisfied 40% , it is a shocker for the dissatisfied to be the highest percentage, that might be a reason for the refurbishment
. Now moving on to the year
after refurbishment
we can easily see a huge improvement such
as 40% are now satisfied it is like the tables have turned , the second biggest percentage being very satisfied which proves a 100% improvement then
the year
before refurbishment
and even the very dissatisfied were at 10% now thankfully it is only 5%. Lastly
, the dissatisfaction in the year
after refurbishment
dropped down to 25% , overall
the positive impact that the refurbishment
had clearly was a great choice from the Ashdown Museum. Finally
, everybody can agree even if they were not a part of the people who voted or went to the museum it is very clear by only looking at the chart.Submitted by alaanoudaltammaami on
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