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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.)

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries. (Figures are based on the minimum daily requirement per peron of 11.5 litres.)
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The table given below presents information about the daily price of
water
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 per individual in five different countries, based on the minimum requirement of 11.5 litres. The data
further
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 includes the daily
cost
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 per person and the percentage of average daily wage. In Tanzania, the daily
cost
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 of
water
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 per person is the highest at 6.4 cents.
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 is followed by Uganda having 4.1 cents spent on the daily requirement of
water
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. Pakistan and the UK have similar values, both sitting at 1.76 and 1.3 respectively.
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, the US has the least amount of money spent on
water
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 necessities at 0.85 cents. When comparing the
cost
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 of
water
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 as a percentage of average daily wage, Tanzania again tops the list with 5.7%. Uganda has a lower percentage at 3.2%, followed by Pakistan at 1.1%.
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, the
cost
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 of the UK is considerably low at 0.013%. The US has the least significant impact on daily wages at 0.006% In conclusion, Tanzania has the highest money spent on
water
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 requirement in terms of
cost
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 per person and average daily wage
whereas
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 the US has the least contribution.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • daily cost
  • per person
  • minimum daily requirement
  • litres
  • comparison
  • assessment
  • analysis
  • evaluation
  • impact
  • citizens
  • relationship
  • availability
  • resources
  • measures
  • manage
  • implications
  • health
  • hygiene
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