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Most Countries allow 18 year olds to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Driving a car at the
age
 of 18 can be unacceptable behaviour for some people, saying it should be at least 25,
while
 others think it is okay to
drive
 a car at that
age
, we will discuss both aspects in
this
 essay. some argue that it is not okay to
drive
 a car at the
age
 of 18 because, they believe that driving is not an easy thing to do since it needs a lot of focus and a wise mind, which teenagers don't have,
for example
, if someone was on a road and he faced a drunk driver that kept cursing him and doing bad things, a teenager would fight him for sure
due to
 a lack of wisdom, and
that is
 going to cause traffic in the road that could possibly harm or even kill somebody,
while
 the big wise
man
 will ignore him and save hundreds of lives.
On the other hand
, some argue that it is okay to
drive
 at the
age
 of 18, they say that 18 is not a teenager but a full-grown
man
 who can think about what is good and what is bad, if a young
man
 drives at 18 he will be more helpful for his family since he can get them anywhere they want,
above all
 that, driving at
such
 a young
age
 can help a young
man
 to have a high sense of responsibility and to be stronger. there is a recent study that says if you put a lot of work into your boy, he will become stronger and better. in conclusion, some people think that 18-year-olds are not trustworthy enough to
drive
,
while
 others think that 18-year-olds are full-grown men and can handle driving. it is on you to choose whether it is good or bad to
drive
 at that
age
, i see that it`s absolutely okay for 18-year-olds to
drive
 because they are men.
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grammar
Make sure to capitalize the first letters of sentences and proper nouns. Avoiding using informal phrases such as 'gonna' or 'it's on you'.
structure
Each paragraph should have one main idea and supporting details. Consider breaking down long sentences for better readability.
transition
Use transitional phrases like 'However', 'Moreover', 'Firstly', 'Secondly' to better link ideas between and within paragraphs.
task achievement
You have discussed both views and given your opinion clearly, which is essential for Task Achievement.
coherence cohesion
You have presented a conclusion that summarizes your main points well.
task achievement
You have provided examples to support your points, which helps make your argument more convincing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • responsibility
  • maturity
  • reckless behavior
  • statistically safer
  • accident rates
  • insurance costs
  • development of driving skills
  • inconvenience
  • public transportation
  • necessity
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