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In Some Countries young people are encourage to work for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies discuss advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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Many nations encourage their younger generation to
work
 for a year in the gap between school graduation and university admission.
This
 essay enumerates the pros and cons of
this
 decision by the
students
.
To begin
 with, many of the universities in the West advise their prospective undergraduate
students
 to
work
 for some time, preferably a year.
This
 has numerous advantages and a few are worth mentioning. It helps
students
 to develop personally and improves cohesion when working within a team.
For example
, medical undergraduates are advised to
work
 for the NHS in the UK before admission to the course. Another benefit of working is financial independence.
Students
 can pay their bills and save for future expenditures,
such
 as books, laptops etc.
On the contrary
, there are some adversities with
this
 system. The major drawback is that a student, who joins
this
, will lose a year than his counterpart, which may interfere with jobs after the course. The competition for employment is evidently high and
this
 will be a significant hurdle for the student to find a livelihood after studies.
In addition
, when
students
work
, these job opportunities are lost as many firms will not allocate these vacancies to the open labour market because
students
 will cover the leave.
To conclude
, there are benefits and drawbacks for
students
 working in between schooling and collegiate education. Governments can intervene to reduce the cons to make it a better option
such
 as giving more weightage for
this
work
 when applying for a related job.
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task achievement
The introduction effectively outlines the topic and sets the stage for the discussion, and both advantages and disadvantages are well-covered.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-organized with clear paragraphs, making it easy for the reader to follow your arguments.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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