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Some people think it is better for one single legal system throughout the world. Other say countries should have own low.

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Some people think
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 it would be a legal
system
 or
countries
 should safe own
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laws
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 is a
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matter
 that maintaining individual
countries
' set of own
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laws
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 is more productive. On one side, one single legal
system
 can retain fairness and equality.
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 conflict having a set of uniform
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 would ensure
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equal
 treatment of all individuals regardless of their geographical location. It would guarantee the protection of human rights.
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, if all
countries
'
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operate under the same legal
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.
On the other hand
,
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 argue that each nation
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processes
 it is distinct cultural, social, and historical contexts, which would be reflected in their legal systems
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 often mirror a society's
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an
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 beliefs and a single global legal
system
 may not adequately accommodate the diverse culture of different
countries
for instance
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one
 country might be socially
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acceptable
 in another.
Therefore
, having their own
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 allows
countries
 to govern in ways that a best way their citizens' needs. In my opinion, I believe that having a single global legal
system
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 of advantages but
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each country to maintain its own of own
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laws
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.
This
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 should not only serve justice but
also
 encompass the distinct cultural and societal values of a nation.
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