In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
Modern days , technology has developed in many fields specifically the transportation sector . Some
people
believe that in the next few years , all transportation vehicles
will be without drivers and in cars, buses and trucks there will be only travellers . This
phenomenon has both pros and cons but this
essay will contend that , on balance ,the advantages of driverless
vehicles
outweigh the negatives.
Let us begin by looking at the benefits of modern vehicles
. One of the main positives is that driverless
metro
trains
reduce human errors and also
travel time . What I mean to say is that metro
trains
decrease the chances of accidents and travel time because they are controlled by a computer system . For example
, in 2023 , in Pakistan, our honourable Prime Minister Imran Khan inaugurated the first driverless
train in the national capital Islamabad . The launch of this
train has benefited millions of people
as it ensures their safety .
Moreover
, in driverless
trains
, vacationers feel safe because in some cases there may be only one or two passengers. For instance
, in India , in 2012 , an incident happened which is called Nahribi because a bus driver attempted rape to a woman utilizing the benefit of his loneliness.
On the other hand
, there are certain demerits of metro
trains
. One of the most significant drawbacks is the lack of jobs because people
who earn money by driving buses and trains
will become jobless.Thus
, the unemployment rate rises .Furthermore
, these vehicles
have made the journey convenient for the public and this
feature makes people
tempted to buy . Thus
, more vehicles
will cause more air and noise pollution which is also
detrimental to society.
To conclude
, some individuals say that in future all vehicles
will become driverless
. This
change has both positives and negatives.By considering the above reasons, I firmly believe that the advantages of metro
trains
out the disadvantages.Submitted by mianraza686 on
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Your essay presents a clear position on the topic, and you have supported this position with relevant arguments and examples. However, to improve your task achievement score, ensure that all arguments are fully developed and directly related to the topic. Consider discussing the impact of driverless technology on private cars and trucks in addition to public transportation.
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Overall, your essay has a clear logical structure with a distinct introduction, body, and conclusion. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother, and there are isolated points that seem less connected to the main topic (like the specific incident mentioned in India). Connect these points more firmly to your main argument to improve coherence.
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