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In many cities there is a lack of space to develop and as a result, in order to modernise, old buildings are demolished and replaced with new buildings. What are the disadvantages of knocking down old buildings? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some people argue that we should demolish old
buildings
 and replace them with new ones to deal with a shortage of space.
This
 essay will explain the
disadvantages
 and the
advantages
 of
this
 idea and I believe the
advantages
 can outweigh the
disadvantegs
Correct your spelling
disadvantages
.
To begin
 with the
disadvantages
, a crucial disadvantage is demolishing cost. These costs include workforces, machines, fuels and waste.
For example
, regarding old
buildings
,
this
 cost is often quite high and it can take over 10 million yen.
According to
 an article, about one-third of city governments in Japan are suffering from a shortage of money because of the plan which proceeds to demolish old
buildings
. If we stop
this
 plan, we can allocate more funds to the other essential fields, education or health care,
for instance
.
However
, there are significant
advantages
; to make more space and keep safe for residents. With regard to the former, we will need more space to deal with overpopulation in the future. Osaka city, which is one of the largest cities in Japan, is predicted to increase its population twice within 30 years.
Therefore
, we should break down old
buildings
 and build new ones where more and more people live . As for the latter, old
buildings
 are likely not to fulfil the rule of housing. Many old
buildings
 built over 50 years ago cannot be enough strong to live in. If there is a big earthquake, these
buildings
 will break down immediately and may harm citizens because of their poles or windows.
Consequently
, it is important to replace old
buildings
 to keep them safe in an emergency. In conclusion,
although
 there are clear
disadvantages
 to knocking down old
buildings
, I believe that these
disadvantages
 are outweighed by the
advantages
.
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language
Ensure accuracy in spelling and grammar, e.g. 'disadvantegs' should be 'disadvantages'. Careful proofreading can help catch these issues.
content
Consider adding more nuanced arguments or counterarguments to further strengthen your essay. This will show your ability to engage critically with the topic.
development
Add a bit more development to your points to provide even better support for your ideas. For instance, you could provide more details about how new buildings support safety standards.
structure
The introduction is clear and sets up the essay's argument effectively. It lays out the plan to discuss both disadvantages and advantages before stating your belief.
coherence
Each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by relevant examples, making your points easy to follow.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the essay and reiterates the main position, providing a satisfying end to the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demolition
  • Modernisation
  • Historical significance
  • Architectural heritage
  • Community identity
  • Environmental impact
  • Unique craftsmanship
  • Cost-efficient
  • Tourism revenues
  • Sense of place
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